So I sent the WIP to another CP. She makes valid points. I'm not knocking her at all, just reporting what she said. Trust me, she's the real deal and she's right.
The beginning is a tick to slow. Now I'll tell you, I suck ogre balls at beginnings. I dunno why, I just do.
They get into the hinky kinky quick. Well, it's erotica, they should.
So far, that's all, but it's constructive and a lot less painful than if it came from an editor. Yanno? And really, she's on the mark. Sure, it sounds like I explained it away. I did and yet I didn't.
Oh, and thanks to Wendi for posting the hunk pic. She's got some great taste. Might let her play with Gerard and Luke for a night. Hee hee.